清明還鄉 (一)

Dear Brother Lou:

Your idea got positive echoes..
I got a few phone calls to check about it.
Maybe you and your friends in Guan-Si can send some pieces for posting...
That will set a leading example for more to follow.
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Could you help me to review and revise this one?

還鄉介腳步
輕輕驚驚慢慢渡
尋冇夢中想介路
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Thank you,
Thomas 4/9/2010