Saturday, January 24, 2015

落腳海唇鹹風伴

搬屋儘冇閒
水浮蓮毋使怨嘆
落腳海唇鹹風伴。

老哩學吹笛(噴笛)
變調人生走音路
淪落異地隨興(意)噴。(pern=吹)

伴隨海草貸(戴?住)
老哩搬屋座定敗
人生尾頂夢冇長。

關西 陳秋鴻 1/22/2015

1 comment:

  1. Hi, Dennis,
    詩个意境盡深,好詩,三行詩个示範佳作。感謝。

    吹笛is much better than噴笛,though the right word of噴 is another type of word, typical Hakka character(中文字典或電腦中沒有)。
    Thank you so much for your cooperation in promoting H3LP.
    CS Lou

    BYI, For you reference, see below.

    搬屋儘冇閒
    水浮蓮毋使怨嘆
    落腳海唇鹹風伴 (伴海風) (洋風伴)

    老哩學吹笛
    變調人生走音路
    淪落異地隨興吹 (吹生趣)

    伴隨海草貸(戴 or 待)
    老哩搬屋座定敗
    人生尾頂夢冇長 (人生尾夢冇幾久)

    Just for your reference, 敗勢,莫見怪。



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