Saturday, May 14, 2016

忍過烏夜迎朝唇

齣事盡難看
棚頂比劃自家爽
棚下寥落冇人看。

漫漫介長夜
長夜漫漫惡夢連
馬九壓胸夢驚醒。

剩著四日le
天邊一線像（似）朝光
忍過烏夜迎朝唇。

漸漸會天光
冇永遠介烏暗夜
日頭定著會探（dam）頭。

關西 陳秋鴻 05/15/2016
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  1. Hakka 3 Line PoemMay 16, 2016 at 8:39 AM

    Hi, Dennis,
    Your poetic sense is excellent indeed.
    I suggest a few words just for your reference.
    Regards,
    CS Lou

    齣事盡難看
    戲棚頂比劃自爽
    棚下寥落冇人看。(冷落is familiar, isn’t it?)

    漫漫介長夜
    長夜漫漫惡夢連 (連惡夢)
    馬九壓胸夢驚醒。(發夢醒)

    剩餘四日哩
    天邊一線現朝光
    忍過暗夜迎朝晨。

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